2007/03/14

I'll be the first to admit that while I'm a good writer, I'm not necessarily a great writer. I think I somehow manage to avoid some of the more common pitfalls, but then again, probably not. Maybe they just don't get pointed out to me, or maybe other people don't see them.

I'm not a great editor, and I tend to self-edit on the fly, especially if I've hand-written something and am transcribing it. As such, a lot of bad probably escapes my view.

Then again, every now and again something catches my eye. I feel bad mocking this one, since I happen to know the person who wrote it, but what the hell:

From CFRA.com:

Soldier Beaten in Morrisburg Bar
Josh Pringle
Tuesday, March 13, 2007

A Canadian soldier who recently returned from Afghanistan is recovering after being in a fight in a Morrisburg bar this weekend.

Master Corporal Collin Fitzgerald says he was jumped from behind, knocked to the ground and repeatedly kicked on Saturday morning.

Fitzgerald tells A-Channel News he doesn't remember being attacked. He says he didn't have any confrontation with anybody in the establishment.

Fitzgerald suffered a broken foot and needed 10 stitches to close a cut.

Ontario Provincial Police have charged a 21-year-old Morrisburg man with aggravated assault.

The OPP continues to investigate.

Fitzgerald was awarded a Medal of Military Valour for braving enemy fire from the Governor General last month.

(Italics added.)

Now, either the GG is extremely pissed with this poor Master Corporal, or the training regimen for GGs is even more impressive than I thought.

3 comments:

Jamie-WTTY said...

Not only is it a misplaced modifier that results in an amusing misrepresentation of the situation, but it's also the wrong preposition! Surely he was presented the medal "by", not "from", the GG.

Unless he just, like, got it in the mail and his mom gave it to him.

FunkyM said...

Yeah, newspapers make tons of mistakes and they usually hear about every single one of them. :)

FunkyM said...

Radio stations too, I assume. Shows how good I am at editing. :P